The Official Writing Challenge
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You drew me right into Kip's story I empathized with him and hurt for his pain yet marveled for his love for the Lord.
There was some great description here and some wonderful insights into the human character. I found it a bit distracting the way you starting describing the individual from Lee-Ann's perspective rather continuing with the man's own inner psyche as the MC. Maybe something to watch out for in the future.
Good writing and great insight. On topic very very well.
The ending surprised me, but I liked it very much.

Very good writing!
I wondered the whole way through who would spend time staring at someone in a washroom, and know so much about the inner hurts of this powerful man. The ending made it all come together.