The Official Writing Challenge
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09/16/10
Shades of Masterpiece Theater... I enjoyed this very much. You very clearly laid out the setting and I could see the two men in the study, feel the dampness in the air, and hear the clink of their glasses. The message was very good, too.

Excellent writing!
09/16/10
Your words painted the scene in my mind so I could see the flickering flames, feel the chill, hear the disappointment in Phil's voice and the quietness in his uncle's. In other words, this story came alive to this reader. A+++!
You really brought this scene alive with your descriptions, and the characters with snappy dialogue. A very enjoyable read with a wonderfully delivered message.
09/16/10
I was shivering and drawing nearer to the fire as I eavesdropped on this conversation between uncle and nephew. Excellent dialog! And the descriptions and all-around writing are stunning.
I enjoyed this honest and forthright talk between the older, wise uncle and his distraught nephew.
I felt like I was reading one of those historical romance novels that I enjoy reading.

I felt and saw everything you described.

This is definately a masterpiece!
09/21/10
I loved the richness of your vocabulary
09/21/10
I loved this conversation. Well crafted. There is a delicate balance in historical fiction when it comes to dialogue, and I tend to lean more toward the suggestion than the heavy dose, but that's personal preference on my part. Nicely done.
09/22/10
This is a wonderful piece of historical fiction.

The only thing that distracted me was when Charles hands the glass to his cousin. Perhaps you meant nephew?
09/22/10
I want to hear more. I could see a novel coming from this and definitely would want to be one of your readers. Excellent!
09/23/10
Congratulations on your EC!
09/23/10
Ahhh, sigh.

Loren Thomas with a pen (keyboard) = Sublime. :)

Just lovely writing. Incredible atmosphere!...as always. Superb dialogue.

Congrats!
09/23/10
Ah, this is wonderful! I love the atmosphere here, it reminds me of the medieval literature I'm reading this week. So very well done!

Congrats on your EC! ^_^
Congratulations, Loren, on EC for this truly masterful story. I LOVED it!