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09/16/10
I must confess to liking the motives of the MC and his "Git R Done" attitude. I think most of us get discouraged with the corruption and failures in our justice system today--but we must not forget that God is in control.
09/16/10
Excellent dialogue and a compelling story.
09/18/10
This was very well written. You were cautious with both dialog and actions, which I applaud. Of course I don't like the tale itself--I think we need to abhor the wickedness we are learning about particularly among the clergy. But it does need to be told, and you told it well.
09/18/10
Wow I had a feeling that last bomb was for the priest, but I was still eager to find out. Even though I somewhat expected it, the ending took me by surprise. That's excellent writing!
09/19/10
I have goosebumps. This was incredible and horrible.

So very likely to happen, too.
09/21/10
I guess you couldn't argue that he wasn't warned. This read a bit like a Douglas Adams story from "The Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxies" and all I could think was Rory going up to his reward saying. "So long, and thanks for all the fish." Aside from that you've presented a very good moral dilemma in a moderately amusing but quite provocative way.
09/21/10
I had a feeling this one might be yours. I love that you are bold enough to write about this topic and with this ending, but then I'm always a big fan of the different and daring. You once again did an amazing job and I'll be surprised if this isn't way up on the top of that list.
09/21/10
Good writing. A little twist on "Be sure, your sins will find you out." :o) You kept my attention all the way through. Thanks!
09/21/10
I liked it, but then some people think I'm radical too! Is this a compliment? I think so.
09/21/10
Wow, love the way you structured the ending. Great story and characters. I got a little bogged down in the middle, but the momentum kept me going. Awesome.
09/22/10
I wondered if the last bomb was for the priest. It's terrible what is happening in our world today. Still, I don't agree with the vigilante justice of the plumber. Well told tale.
09/23/10
Congratulations for placing 14th in your level and 20th overall!