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09/16/10
Suspense packed. Not sure how this ties into the inner person in any direct way;and
to give the story more credibility, I would like some indication and more detail about how long it took for the rescue. However you did a good job of getting me to the finish line.
It was full of suspense. I too often feel like I'm lost at sea with the sharks circling. Your metaphor was clear for me, almost too clear. Well done.
09/18/10
Good story, and reminder or how danger and helplessness bring out the innermost thoughts. Nice ending.
09/21/10
It's easy to make promises to God in the midst of a difficult situation. It takes real dedication to keep those promises when the seas of life smooth out. I'm glad that your characters have decided to keep their vows.
Congratulations for placing 14th in your level!