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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Think (09/02/10)

TITLE: Operation A.C.T
By Ruth Neilson


She sat perched on a polished deck, watching the preparations finish. Today was the day to see if all of their hard work and training was going to pay off. Cheri Brum took a deep breath and walked across the platform and looked down at the four Lobe sisters that where part of her crew.

"Fran and Tegan, are all systems go?" Fran looked up and then nudged her sister, Tegan, pulling off one of Tegan's headset before they both flashed Cheri a thumbs up and returned to their screens. The data was flowing into place. Tegan laughed happily as she watched the synapses lighting up. She pressed another button and the gray matter surrounding their base started to hum with anticipation. "Good. Now where are your sisters?"

"Parry's testing the reflexes and exercising, preparing for the long haul."

"Good. And Oceane are you ready?"

Oceane piped up, her large eyes peering through her thick glasses, "We have visual contact, boss."

Cheri took a deep breath and nodded. "Okay ladies, this will be a long one. This will be line-up assessments that you should expect to come across: English, math, reading, and science."

The Lobe sisters nodded: this was nothing new to them, the subjects were well known...it was just the information in them that was always the question. As Cheri continued to prep the team, Tegan continued to monitor the airwaves for any sign that the tests were about to begin.

Suddenly, her head popped up and Tegan barked, "Boss, we have instructions. It's show time!"

All eyes focused on Tegan as she began to scribble instructions, mumbling to herself, "fill in the entire circle...45 minutes for first test...do not go further...do not go back..."

Their base hummed louder as specific information for English began to bubble up. Thoughts, such as adjectives, adverbs, and run-on sentences began to fill the screens and Cheri Brum grinned.

"Alright ladies, it's show time. Let's get to thinking! Pace ourselves we've got a long morning otherwise."
Cheri Brum—Cerebrum
Fran Lobe—Frontal Lobe which is associated reasoning, planning, parts of speech, movement, emotions, and problem solving
Parry Lobe—Parietal Lobe which is associated with movement, orientation, recognition, perception of stimuli
Oceane Lobe—Occipital Lobe which is associated with visual processing
Tegan Lobe—Temporal Lobe which is associated with perception and recognition of auditory stimuli, memory, and speech

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Sarah Heywood09/09/10
Very creative! Since having a small stroke 3 yrs ago, I have become very familiar with the different parts of the brain and their functions. God truly created an amazing organ when he designed our brains! I noticed a typo in your first paragraph ("where" instead of "were") but it only momentarily distracted me. I enjoyed this - good job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/11/10
Nice job certainly a freash POV
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/11/10
Nice job certainly a freash POV
Rachel Phelps09/15/10
Love it! As someone who works with mental processing in kids all day, this was both amusing and accurate. Well done!
Amy Michelle Wiley 09/16/10
Creative story! I "got it" about a third of the way in, I think, and then was trying to figure out some of the names. A few minor grammar issues, but otherwise fun story!
Catrina Bradley 09/16/10
Very clever! I enjoyed this! When I saw the initials A.C.T., I thought of the test but never imagined it would turn out to be theme of your story. :)