The Official Writing Challenge
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09/09/10
An enjoyable (if slightly disturbing!) take on the story of the fall of mankind. Very, very well-done!
Very gripping writing! I couldn't help but relate it to Frank Perretti's style. Great job!
09/11/10
It is disturbing to hear the enemy's point of view and hear him speak, probably because you've written it so well. Very good writing.
This is well done and full of chills and thrills
09/12/10
I love your rich and varied adjectives, full of hellish intensity
WOW! Glad I did not read this before bedtime!

Reminds me of Frank Perretti (sp?)writings.

We can be so fooled by what appears beautiful. Good job!
Wow! C.S. Lewis' Screwtape Letters on overdrive! Your descriptions are great, but that's as close as I want to get to Satan's lair. :o)
09/16/10
I love your creativity. This is a well-crafted, excellent take on the topic. Well done.
09/16/10
This is close to being TOO real! The opening told us exactly where we were, and your descriptions and dialog are chilling. I think the ending may have gone on too long - that it could have ended "sssspecialty". Good stuff, Bryan! I still have goosebumps. [shiver]
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and in the top 30 overall!