The Official Writing Challenge
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This was a fun story with some nice humor sprinkled in it.

Make sure you start a new paragraph when a new person is talking.

Isn't it wonderful how God works His magic? You definitely showed how He can turn something ordinary into something wonderful.
I enjoyed this. It felt real to me. Like the feminine wiles muscle reference. Like Shann said, pay attention to paragraphing w/ new person speaking.
You have a feel for dialogue (it's believable) and did a good job with the setting. Nice job, keep writing!
I enjoyed this. I especially loved the twist at the end. Good job!
This story does a great job of showing how our lives are witnesses when we don't even know it.
09/08/10
This plays out every once in a while. Don't you think the Father smiles when His plan comes together?