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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Feel (emotions) (08/26/10)

TITLE: Mrs Proverbs 31
By Melanie Kerr
09/01/10


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Madam, I have this to say
Your virtues leave me reeling
The list of all the things you do
Provokes in me much squealing

Who indeed can find a wife so
Noble and exalted?
Accomplished in so many fields
A wife who canít be faulted

I envy that your husband has
Such confidence in you
His life is blessed in myriad ways
Through all the things you do

I must confess I cannot spin
And neither can I knit
I lack the patience and the skill
And things I make donít fit

You trawl the shops and bargains seek
You travel far and wide
And nothing past its ďuse byĒ date
Will in your fridge reside

Your eagerness to leave your bed
On dark and wintry days
Preparing meals for kith and kin
I sigh, such zeal dismays

You own a field, I have a yard
No vines, just grass and flowers
And yet, for me, to keep it neat
And tidy takes me hours

Such profits fill your coffers with
A pile of coins so high
I worry that my ends wonít meet
My barrel bottomís dry

Your arms are open to the poor
While mine are tucked away
There may be money in your purse
But I have bills to pay

When winter comes I cannot laugh
With frozen pipes to mend
But you clothed in your scarlet robes
The snow and ice transcend

Your words uplift, encourage and
Thereís wisdom on your tongue
Too often I am gibbering
My take on life unsung

The list goes on ad-nauseam
Youíve set the bar so high
I strive so hard to be like you
God knows I really try

I feel defeated, Iím so weak
While you are hearty, strong
A blessed and fruitful life is yours
While mine is going wrong

You make me feel inadequate
I ask the question why -
That any man when youíre around
Would marry such as I

My husband laughs and smiles and says
Iím Proverbs 32
That Iím his perfect partner and
Heís really scared of you!


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Robyn Burke09/02/10
Very clever! Love that the husband recognizes a winner in a Proverbs 32 wife.
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/02/10
I've been a bit in awe of the Proverbs 21 woman myself. Cleverly written poem with a just-right conclusion.
Charla Diehl 09/03/10
I enjoyed this poem for its entertaining content, perfect rhyme and the fact that you based it on Sripture. A+ in my book.
Beth LaBuff 09/04/10
LOL! I love that you made up the "Proverbs 32" man. This is wonderfully entertaining with a message! Great work!
Caitlyn Meissner09/05/10
Oh, that Proverbs 31 woman. *groans* I feel the same way. Good job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/06/10
I enjoyed all the humor sprinkled throughout this verse. Then I have a Psalm to read.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/06/10
Oops I meant I need to read Proberbs 31:)
Kate Oliver Webb09/07/10
This is absolutely one of the best I've read, anywhere, for a long, long time!!!
The rhyme was spectacularly done; the wording solid and full of imagery and passion for your plight. I grinned widely all the way through, and laughed outright at the ending. Excellent message, with that lovely spoonful of sugar to help it go down. Very well done!
Cheryl Harrison 09/07/10
I absolutely loved this, especially the last stanza! Made me laugh. Great job!
Jody Day 09/08/10
This was a hoot! I really feel like this sometimes.
Rachel Phelps09/08/10
Oh, this is great. So much fun with an awesome message to boot. Well done!
Beth LaBuff 09/09/10
Congrats on your Editor's Choice award, Melanie! I'm still smiling over the Proverbs 32 man. :)
Daniel Kane09/10/10
I really loved this. The ending made me smile. You portrayed the 'perfect wife' very well, and especially the MC's feelings for that woman. I could really get into this. Good job.