The Official Writing Challenge
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09/02/10
It's amazing how some things can turn into big, huge problems if we let them. You did a great job demonstrating just that.
09/07/10
I like the way you introduced the characters in this. There was a lot of telling and "due" and "do" mean different things. Overall this is a good concept. With some polishing it will truly shine.