The Official Writing Challenge
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You did an excellent job with your vivid descriptions I could easily picture the battlefield. The characters were interesting, I especially wanted to know more about the king.
09/05/10
Held my attention all the way through, and illustrated the topic very all. Good Writing.
09/05/10
Oops, meant very "well" Guess it's time to get some sleep.
09/07/10
Gripping. the description of the king's leprosy is awe-inspiring. But is it factual? Having worked with leprosy patients I must say very few will be so emaciated and they will not be able to live a normal life if they have so little flesh, leave alone lead a battle! But the story is good!
09/07/10
This story has so much packed into the tiny space given. Awesome job!

For the record - I know the author and the story of King Baldwin IV. He is factually presented in this story (as incredible as it seems). A quick google search will give more details.
09/07/10
This is factual. I have done the research for several years now and have conversed with several historians and doctors on this matter.

Thank you for the comments and kind words, everyone! I really do appreciate it.
Cool entry! It didn't sound like a first person story at first, but I'm glad it turned out to be one. I really felt like I was there with your MC. The descriptions of the leper king were creepy, but I like how you managed to build empathy for him. Great job with your first article!
Blessings!
09/07/10
I sit here with mouth aghast. Details so vivid, I was watching death and decay. Loved the unique MC POV. Kudos, this is excellently crafted.
wow. this is your first FW challenge? holy moly. this was fantastic. I mean, really, really fantastic. I might not have some of the "-'s" in there and maybe bright blue eyes instead of azure- but those are such minor, teensy little picks. look out challenge- we've got a great contender here. bellissima.
09/08/10
Wow, this is very well done. Your details are exquisite. I was thrown by the switch to first person, since the opening paragraphs didn't seem to carry the narrator's voice. Still, this is a very strong entry. Well done!
Really loved the story!
Keep on writing, and God Bless!!!
09/09/10
You go girl!!! Congrats on Editor's Choice with your first entry! lol, only two more to Masters ;-)
09/09/10
Chilling details, excellently written and well deserving of a win! Congratulations!
09/11/10
This is such a gripping tale, and wonderfully written, Serafia. I've never heard of the battle. It's such an amazing story. Super congrats on your ribbon and Editor's Choice award!