The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow, I was breathing for Shannon myself! Great writing, great story . . . thank you for the happy ending!
I knew there would be CPR stories. You had me holding my breath and mentally tugging at the sweater. The ending felt a bit anticlimactic but maybe it's because I was still holding my breath and wondering if it was over. Good job on the pace and intensity.
Wow - I'm another one holding my breath. A brilliant story, beautifully told.
Whew! I too, was holding my breath as I kept reading in hopes of a happy ending. Thank you for not disappointing me. Very tense.
This was very suspenseful. As soon as I read that the life jackets were in the boat but not on Shannon, I thought she was doomed. I sat at the edge of the chair hardly breathing myself. The ending was sweet as so typical of a 4 yo.