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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Breathe (08/19/10)

TITLE: Before Righteousness Ever Approached The Healing Effusion
By Tina Leonard


“Wait for me!” she bellowed from the escalator as her husband Tom and son Nicholas hurried toward the clearance.

“Honey, we don’t want to miss all the good stuff!” Tom snickered back at her in a sarcastic tone, as he winked at Nicholas.

Nicholas soon caught on to his Father’s teasing scheme and ever so smoothly chimed in.

“Mom, come on someone is going to get that pair of shoes you have been promising me since last month hurry up!”

She caught up with them just in time for them to burst out in laughter giving each other a high five.

“Funny. Really cute guys, go ahead get your laugh on and when the time comes to pick out bargains we shall see whose hands are the fullest in the end.”

Amanda always knew how to find a bargain. She could shop for hours on her days off and leave with clothes for everyone in the family at the cost of what most people spend on one.
Everyone at church always thought they had a lot of money because their family always dressed nice and had on a good pair of shoes. Not to mention she and Tom both drove very nice vehicles and they always seemed to be able to go on vacation.

When Nicholas turned nine, Amanda decided to start engaging him in life lessons and teaching him how to bargain hunt. She and Tom agreed that once a month they would make it a family outing. Unfortunately, Amanda was scheduled to work on the only day they could be together in the evening. Which means she has to come straight from the office to the mall.

“Honey, have you two boys had anything to eat yet I am starving”.

“Yes, I grilled us out some “Big Man” burgers before we left the house and Nicholas ate each and every bite of that bad boy! I left you one in the fridge at the house.”

“I will have to pass, I think I am going to grab something on the way home cause I was not able to take lunch today. Amanda said, as she held up the sleeve of a T-shirt in the men’s section.

She looked at Tom inquisitively, “Honey, would you ever have worn something like this?”

Tom stopped and thought for a moment, uncertain of how to respond in the correct manner. She knew the way his life used to be so if he gave her the wrong response she was likely to accuse him of fibbing.

After what seemed to be twenty minutes in his mind, Tom stepped out on a different limb and responded back with a question instead.

“I don’t know babe, would you have worn it?” She just shrugged her shoulders and they all continued to look for different bargains.

“Honey, I think I am going to head home. I am exhausted and I just cannot wait any longer to eat something. If you and Nicholas want to stay that’s fine, but you all just wait until next month! You have both had it!” She laughed as Tom kissed her head and then tapped her on the shoulder and motioned her to turn around.

Nicholas came walking toward them only carrying the shirt she had asked Tom about earlier.

“Honey, what are you doing with that? You can’t buy that buddy, that is not a good shirt to have.” Nicholas looked up at his dad torn and confused.

“But, daddy you said you used to drink that stuff all the time and that the blood that Jesus spilled out on the cross when He breathed his last breath and said it was all finished made you free. I thought it would be a good shirt for you to wear to church and it’s on sale for two dollars. I figure that kind of savings I would have enough to put the rest in the plate at church!”

Tom grabbed the shirt, looked at Amanda and patted Nicholas’ head. “Yeah, thank God for that breath! I do have too much blood in my alcohol system”

Amanda fought back tears of joy. In that moment she realized that Nicholas had learned the most important life lesson they could ever teach him. The blood of Jesus has the power to conquer all addictions and strongholds. She chuckled as she fought back more tears, “Honey he is right, let’s give everyone at church something worth talking about!”

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/27/10
You did a good job of making the characters seem real. I figured the shirt must have advertised some form of alcohol. It definitely would make people talk if worn to church. Your message was inspired, and I liked the attitude about being set free from addictions and other sins by the blood of Jesus.
Edmond Ng 09/02/10
Good characterization!