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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Breathe (08/19/10)

TITLE: Breathed Upon
By Melanie Kerr
08/25/10


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I am breathed upon
I am picked-up dust from the
Earth at His feet and
Carefully, deliberately and prayerfully shaped
I am stretched out arms and legs
Fashioned torso and head
Moulded in His Hands
He defines my boundaries
This - His image in clay
Form without animation
He imparts His life to me as
I am breathed upon

I am breathed upon
And I inhale
Drawing into myself
Wondrously, gloriously, humbly
His permission to exist
Nerves tingle, synapses explode
Thoughts tumble about my head
I am dizzy with sensation
Heat and light
Scent and texture
I proclaim with joy that
I am breathed upon

I am breathed upon
Yet where is His breath?
Sin pokes holes in my spirit and
Relentlessly, painfully and inevitably
His breath bleeds out
I swap intimacy for independence and
Vibrant life chills to luke-warm
The world wraps rough hands
Around my throat and I cannot breathe
I listen to a different truth
And surrender the knowledge that
I am breathed upon

I AM breathed upon
A truth He refuses to surrender
He wears my dust
Grace - amazing, astonishing and astounding
He chases me down
He swaps His righteousness for my filth
And mends what is broken
Hands outstretched He invites me in
I yield to His truth
His image in me is restored
And I know again
I AM breathed upon


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Caitlyn Meissner08/29/10
Wow! That was a really great poem. Loved it! :)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/30/10
This is beautiful. You did an outstanding job describing the typical Christian life.
Charla Diehl 08/30/10
I liked the progression of each verse and the impact of the repetitive last line in each verse. You leave your reader with much food for thought.
Gregory Kane08/30/10
I like the way subsequent verses develop the story of redemption. Powerfully done
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/31/10
Really excellent free verse poem, beautifully written
Cheryl Harrison 09/01/10
Beautiful...I loved every word. Especially liked: Moulded in His Hands
He defines my boundaries
This - His image in clay
and I AM breathed upon
A truth He refuses to surrender
He wears my dust
Grace - amazing, astonishing and astounding
. Such a poetic picture of creation and redemption. Good job.

Sarah Elisabeth 09/01/10
Wow, what a touching and well done poem! Thanks!