The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a beautiful story from beginning to end.
08/26/10
Nice - I enjoyed this progression of life story. Good writing!
08/29/10
Your writing, the prose, is so beautiful, like a flowing river of rhythm. When I reached the paragraph mentioning music, I though ah, yes, of course music has to be involved because of the perfect harmony of your phrasing.

While reading this piece I felt like I was floating in a warm bath, absolutely delightful.

If I were to change anything, it would be to eliminate the first paragraph because, although beautifully written, it contains obvious elements and only works to delay what I believe is your actual beginning--the second paragraph.

Very well done. I wouldn't be surprised to see this one placing well during this challenge.