The Official Writing Challenge
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08/19/10
Good illustration of Jesus' pure and patient love--and the healing it brings once we invite Him into our hearts.
Wow this is heavy stuff. You really kept me mesmerized throughout the entire read.
You have written a wonderful story of self-discovery and salvation through the only one who truly knows you.
I believe you masterfully nailed every person alive!
08/23/10
I absolutely love that the MC did not have a specified gender...because the MC is all of us, to some degree. I loved the bookend phrases, with their opposite meanings. Excellent piece of writing.
There are no secrets from the one who knows our heart. Well written, with insight.
08/23/10
I liked how you showed that the MC was struggling with being an "accident" without a purpose, yet when cornered by Truth a little Light slipped in to show otherwise. I also liked the opening and closing lines.
08/24/10
So different. In reading this I felt like I was drawn into a thick, dense and muddled existance. Your writing did this. It is a wonderful example of what the MC felt about her life? Good writing. deep.


Mona
Though your MC will surely have more tough times ahead, it's a blessing to see his/her transformation in Jesus Christ.
08/24/10
Very captivating! I loved the way the beginning captures the reader's attention. Very vivid detail through the entire story.
You did a great job at peeling away layers to show what is truly within your MC. Love the message. It's one many of us can relate to.
08/25/10
Truly great stuff here, and yes, we can all relate. I too like the "bookends;" the word flow between them is well-paced, thorough without being too wordy. Just an overall good job.
08/26/10
Superb! I can't think that anyone reading this would not be able to connect. I loved the assurance at the end that all the fears were dealt with.
08/27/10
Beautifully written Rachel. Deep, truthful and joymaking.
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and in the top 30 overall and for your EC.