The Official Writing Challenge
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08/19/10
Poignant, intriguing, an attention grabber. Great finish line. Nicely done.
08/19/10
Stirring and sad, yet this ends on a hopeful note. I found this to be tastefully written when describing the intimacies of marriage. Great job.
Evocative. Enigmatic in its honesty. Modigliani in its expression.
Although there is underlying sadness and despair, the hope in the story overcame the sadness. I felt in tune with your MC. In today's world, it can be so difficult to stay together and be faithful to one another. Outstanding job on what must have been a difficult story to write.
08/22/10
This story is so full of lovely, sad imagery it makes my heart ache. Beautiful work, as always.
Beautifully written message that regardless of the transgression, we all need to know that someone we love...cares. I agree that this is tastefully done in all of its vivid tenderness.
What a beautifully sad way to paint discernment. Your nuances are perfect. You have a gift.
Oh Chely... Such sadness but with a taste of hope. This piece is magnificent.
08/25/10
Simply outstanding. Whew. I think I held my breath the whole time!
08/25/10
Beautiful, tender, sad, totally evocative. Yes, those intimate moments were perfectly written; the less said, the more powerful in this case. I felt it also left a little room for the reader to project his/her own mood or experience onto the ending; was there, perhaps, just a tiny touch of doubt remaining? Just my thought....
08/26/10
Wow. Oh, wow. You made me feel the emotions of the MC. I was living every thought and moment with her--I felt almost intrusive.
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and in the top 30 overall.
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and in the top 30 overall.