The Official Writing Challenge
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08/19/10
This is a great story. It reminds me of something I'd read in Aesop's Fables. I was confused a bit,there were a lot of names and I was having trouble figuring it all out. Then I read it again and it became clearer. There were times when an added word was there or a word was missing. I figured from my own experience that happened when you were cutting words to keep it under 750. It's a creative and fun idea. I'd love to read more stories with these characters.
08/19/10
I love it all; from the title to the characters. It was totally out of the box. Very well done. Blessings, Ruth
08/21/10
Very interesting. I was surprised to discover that the triplets were actually his daughters in the end. Discern was very wise. Wait, Wisdom is her mother. Okay, she was very discerning. ;)
08/23/10
You definitely captured my full attention with this cleverly written entry. Reminded me of Pilgrims Progress...unique! However, I too, did have a little trouble keeping up with who was who.
08/23/10
An extremely clever, whirlwind of a story! Lots of fun!
08/25/10
Awesome! I'd read more about this little society - a book of vignettes would be nice. :) Loved it!
08/25/10
A Pandora's Box of a kind, clever.
It was a bit confusing, but mostly due to the fast-pace of it.
You made some very clear points within the content. Creative, for sure.

Mona
08/30/10
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and in the top 30 overall.