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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Discern (08/12/10)

TITLE: Danger without Discernment
By Verna Cole Mitchell
08/17/10


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Felipe Fly cannot discern
The danger thatís ahead,
When first he dares to step into
The spiderís silken thread,

While Max Mosquito does not see
How it could ever be
That following a lacy line
Might lead to jeopardy.

Though Gill Grasshopper jumps quite high,
His thinkingís pretty dense.
He cannot tell that once heís trapped,
Heíll be without defense.

And Billy Beetle does not sense
His chance of freedomís dim,
For when inside spun prison walls,
Escape is out for him.

Poor Matthew Mothís been often known
To fly too close to flame.
Itís likely he wonít comprehend
This mesh is not a game.

Alas for Willy Wally Wasp,
Who lacks discrimination!
The peril that he fails to note
Will cause decapitation.

The lesson to be learned from these,
All lacking in perception,
Is to be wise to Satanís wiles,
His evil mindís conception.

Our Lord has written in His Word,
The plan of His salvation,
And if weíre wise and yield to Him,
Heíll save us from damnation.


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Lillian Rhoades 08/19/10
Nice, Nice, Nice! Creative,
perceptive, great timing and rhyming. Can you tell I loved it?
Charla Diehl 08/19/10
This piece fits the topic perfectly. A+ on the rhyme and meter, and of course the message too.
Loren T. Lowery08/19/10
Well, to be completely honest, I'm glad a couple of those bugs did get caught : ) However, the message is very clear and clever and I so enjoyed reading it and having it all run through my mind.
Randy Chambers08/20/10
Very nice. Good flow. And good lesson.
Mariane Holbrook08/20/10
This is just too cute for words. I would love to be an illustrator and draw frustrated faces on all these bug once they're caught. Your meter and rhyme are impeccable and I love the way you tied it all up with a good spiritual application. I wondered how you'd end it and I was especially pleased that you did it this way. Big time Kudos!!
Linda Payne08/21/10
Cute poetic allegory. How often we become ensnared because we do not heed and discern.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/22/10
This poem is a great analogy of life. I enjoyed it immensely.
Chely Roach08/23/10
Absolutely delightful! Impeccable meter and rhyme, with a perfect spiritual application. :) Loved it!
AnneRene' Capp 08/23/10
Absolutely love the animation in this, using such powerful truth. You skillfully mastered a web of fun and dire warning at the same time.
Betty Castleberry08/23/10
Love the humorous touches,and love the message you wove into this poem. You got it across without hitting your reader over the head with it. I love this poem!
Ruth Brown 08/23/10
VEry clever and humorous with the true message. Excellent,May God continue to bless you as you write. Ruth
Carol Penhorwood 08/24/10
Oh, yes! You've done it again, Verna. Masterful!
Brenda Rice 08/24/10
Wow! This is so good! I love the rhyme and meter of this. It is just adorable and fun.
Rachel Phelps08/25/10
Too cute and insightful! Loved it!
Mona Purvis08/25/10
Verna, this is top-notch and just begging to be illustrated. I would buy it. How you reach people through your choice of words is just magical.
Love it so much.

Mona
Melanie Kerr 08/26/10
I enjoyed the poem - particularly the one that got decapitated. Lovely use of rhyme.
Carole Robishaw 08/26/10
Loved this, really good pictures formed as I read, great ending.
Yvonne Blake 08/26/10
Congratulations, Verna!
Is the moral to this story,
"Consider the bugs and be wise" ?
Jody Day 08/26/10
I really enjoyed this! Congratulations.
Beth LaBuff 08/26/10
Clever story, rhymes, with excellent meter and message! Love this, Verna! Congrats on your Editor's Choice!!
Nancy Sullivan 08/26/10
Congratulations on making the top three. You made the lesson on discernment so much fun! Great job. Nancy