The Official Writing Challenge
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08/19/10
Nice, Nice, Nice! Creative,
perceptive, great timing and rhyming. Can you tell I loved it?
08/19/10
This piece fits the topic perfectly. A+ on the rhyme and meter, and of course the message too.
08/19/10
Well, to be completely honest, I'm glad a couple of those bugs did get caught : ) However, the message is very clear and clever and I so enjoyed reading it and having it all run through my mind.
08/20/10
Very nice. Good flow. And good lesson.
08/20/10
This is just too cute for words. I would love to be an illustrator and draw frustrated faces on all these bug once they're caught. Your meter and rhyme are impeccable and I love the way you tied it all up with a good spiritual application. I wondered how you'd end it and I was especially pleased that you did it this way. Big time Kudos!!
08/21/10
Cute poetic allegory. How often we become ensnared because we do not heed and discern.
08/22/10
This poem is a great analogy of life. I enjoyed it immensely.
08/23/10
Absolutely delightful! Impeccable meter and rhyme, with a perfect spiritual application. :) Loved it!
08/23/10
Absolutely love the animation in this, using such powerful truth. You skillfully mastered a web of fun and dire warning at the same time.
08/23/10
Love the humorous touches,and love the message you wove into this poem. You got it across without hitting your reader over the head with it. I love this poem!
08/23/10
VEry clever and humorous with the true message. Excellent,May God continue to bless you as you write. Ruth
08/24/10
Oh, yes! You've done it again, Verna. Masterful!
08/24/10
Wow! This is so good! I love the rhyme and meter of this. It is just adorable and fun.
08/25/10
Too cute and insightful! Loved it!
08/25/10
Verna, this is top-notch and just begging to be illustrated. I would buy it. How you reach people through your choice of words is just magical.
Love it so much.

Mona
08/26/10
I enjoyed the poem - particularly the one that got decapitated. Lovely use of rhyme.
08/26/10
Loved this, really good pictures formed as I read, great ending.
08/26/10
Congratulations, Verna!
Is the moral to this story,
"Consider the bugs and be wise" ?
08/26/10
I really enjoyed this! Congratulations.
08/26/10
Clever story, rhymes, with excellent meter and message! Love this, Verna! Congrats on your Editor's Choice!!
08/26/10
Congratulations on making the top three. You made the lesson on discernment so much fun! Great job. Nancy