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It's a suspenseful story. It kept me on the edge of my chair. It ended kind of abruptly. I was hoping to see if my guess was right. I thought JD might have been the predator. This reminded me of one of my favorite suspense authors, Patricia Cornwell, I hope you keep writing this story. It would make a great chapter in a novel.
Whew...loved the pace and the story! As for your ending, all I could think of is...good message about warning others and when they repeatedly refuse to listen, it's time to walk away, brushing the dust from your feet. :)
08/19/10
If people would only listen. Well done, Blessings, Ruth