The Official Writing Challenge
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08/13/10
I never tire of the way God uses people to accomplish His work. Your story is a perfect illustration of this. Your writing drew me in and I was right there enjoying the demo myself. Good job.
08/17/10
I'm glad you focused on the healing and redemption in this piece instead of the pain and suffering that led to your MC's strawberry scrub encounter. You told us enough for us to know why your MC felt this way without getting into the gory details. A wonderful piece that clearly demonstrates the concept of "show, don't tell"!
08/17/10
Love the gentle realization here. Your last paragraph is lovely. Wonderful.
Just the fact that she entered the store at all was a minor victory. I half expected her to exit when she learned she would be touched and her hand and arm massaged. But another victory and then the spiritual application. Beautifully written, just like everything else you write!