The Official Writing Challenge
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08/12/10
Interesting way to handle the subject. It's not the sort of touch I'd like:-), but I like the unique way you approached it. The title was somewhat puzzling. Did you intend to convey that the
"two" were too good and unbelivably naive in the face of evil around them?
I had the feeling it was going to be a pick-pocket job. You kept me reading with the delightful descriptions. At least, they had their boarding passes. it would be awful to miss out on seeing Alaska!
I enjoyed this so much. You had my attention throughout the entire story and I learned something to boot! I was so glad for the extra $500.00 in his shoe...didn't see that coming but left me feeling good!
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level.
08/23/10
Virgil, this was so well done.
Could it be this was a true story? You are very gifted. The story flowed right along taking me in. Blessings, Ruth