The Official Writing Challenge
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08/12/10
You did a superb job with the retelling of a familiar Bible story in this poem. Rhyme and meter are A+ in this entry.
I got a particularly special treat out of your poem because I almost wrote about that Biblical account myself ;) In the end I went with a different idea, but you defiantly conveyed the message far better than I could have! Masterfully written, and I loved how well it fit the title! :)
08/18/10
A lovely poem, I particularly love your final four lines. Just great.
The first verse felt like something I could have said. Then as I read on, I realized who the MC was. You made it so easy to see what she must have felt and known. The flow is perfect, it just rolls off my tongue.