The Official Writing Challenge
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This is so great. The dialogue in the young boy's head was perfect. The wisdom of the parents was also a great lesson.
08/05/10
I really enjoyed this. There's something about homemade chocoloate chip cookies (even if it's the nestle kind that you simply slice and bake) that spells love, home, and goodness.

I loved how you presented the mind of the child (he was certain no one understood him) and the mind of the knowing parents.

08/06/10
This was a sweet story! What wise parents Brit had. Very good writing!
08/06/10
You did a good job capturing the feelings of a boy stuck with three sisters and a dad who didn't believe him. Great story. I admire the wisdom of the parents.
Great story. I loved the ending, especially realizing that his parents had known all along. Good job.
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