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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: See (07/22/10)

TITLE: Hidden Me
By Kenn Allan
07/29/10


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HIDDEN ME

If I should ask one hundred eyes
To take a look at me,
They’d see a liberated soul
Whom Jesus died to free,
But deep within this mortal shell
Entwined in earth’s debris,
A dark reflection lies in wait—
The Me they cannot see.

I’ve sensed his presence many years
(At least to some degree),
And felt him loosen up my tongue
With ire or jealousy,
Then blame my lack of self-control
On genealogy—
But when the people stop and stare,
They only look at me.

I cannot count the days and nights
I’ve prayed on bended knee
To ask the Lord to intervene
And make this scoundrel flee,
But He replied, “My saving grace
Is quite enough for thee,
So you might follow not in pride,
But in humility.”

I always thought two couldn't walk
Unless they both agree,
Yet I am forced to share his load
By heavenly decree;
Perhaps someday he’ll fade away
To anonymity—
Then nevermore shall I recall
The Me I used to be.


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Margaret Kearley 08/01/10
Amen and Amen! Brilliantly worded - an amazing poem. Makes me think of Paul's words in Romans 7:14-24. Praise God for verse 25!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/01/10
This poem speaks volumes. It evoked such a sadness that I too often can relate to.
Amy Michelle Wiley 08/01/10
Awesome poem. It flows really well and I love the message. Someday we'll be free of our flesh!
Laury Hubrich 08/02/10
We all have a me we would like to stay hidden. Nicely written...
Beth LaBuff 08/02/10
Exquisite poetry! I love this phrase, "But deep within this mortal shell -- Entwined in earth’s debris," I appreciate all your Biblical allusions, like "two walking / agreeing" and "dark reflection" as well as many others.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/03/10
This is a beautiful way to present our problem--not to be completely solved until eternity. Wonderful word choices and placement.
Kate Oliver Webb08/04/10
I am so grateful I was able to read your offering. And that's what I felt it was: an offering of your innermost soul's struggle with our humanity. This needs a far wider audience, my friend. It is a beautiful, well-crafted and rich work of art.
Lollie Hofer 08/05/10
Great take on this week's topic. We can all relate to that scoundrel "me" you have creatively identified.