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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: See (07/22/10)

TITLE: Let the Fir Fly
By Marita Thelander
07/28/10


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“Aw, for the love of Pete,” George slammed his coffee mug on the table, brown liquid splattered his newspaper.

The bell on the door jingled. “And it just keeps getting better,” George rolled his eyes.

“Mornin’,” Stan nodded his hellos to the usual crowd in the tiny coffee shop. The waitress met him at his table in the back corner, facing out, so he could have a view of all that went on inside and out via the large window. “Thank you, Annie. I spotted fresh maple bars. I think I’ll have one today.”

“So… what’s your blood sugar this morning, Stan?” Annie winked.

“Let it soar,” George blurted. “Maybe he’ll go into a diabetic coma and we can all be at peace.”

Everybody ducked their heads. Generally the regulars would sit in their usual places and carry on a lively discussion; the ritual of the retired. The pattern was always the same. They started with local high school sports, then college level, and on to professional leagues.

Once that horse was dead and beaten, they’d move to local politics, state capitol happenings, and the President’s inability to let us truly be free Americans. If time allowed, they’d touch on religion, to which none were truly qualified to have a substantial opinion. That’s when they’d involve Annie, the local preacher’s wife turned barista.

Stan opened his newspaper with exaggerated flair. “Well looky here, George. I think Derrick caught your better side in this photo with the ever-present gaping hole in your face.”

“Did you notice the bumbling idiot in the background picking his nose?”

“I was picking my teeth with a toothpick.”

“In public…equally disgusting,” George shook his head.

Annie refilled cups and winked at the other customers. “This oughtta be good,” she whispered.

Everyone knew exactly what George and Stan squabbled about. The son of the Graham-Gazette editor recently took over the photography and some of the local reporting. Derrick had a knack for riding the edge of controversy with the same skill he’d used to grind down the courthouse railing in the wee hours of the morning as a rebellious teen.

*Jingle-jangle*

All eyes riveted on the newcomer. Derrick strode in with peacock pride. “Mornin’ Miss Annie.” The use of her Sunday School title never failed to add charm to his glowing-white, ornery grin.

“Good morning, Ricky,” Annie couldn’t resist the childhood nickname. “Usual?”

His shimmering smile was the only answer she needed before she cranked out a triple-short-Americano with cream.

“Guess what I saw on my way here, Miss Annie?”

“Umm…” She noticed several pairs of eyes on them and decided to play along. “The cross country team streaking again? Did you get photos?”

“That’s a good one, but no. Actually,” Derrick stuffed a dollar into the tip jar, “the public utility truck parked by that 60’ Douglas fir that was the heated discussion last night at Town Council.

George spewed coffee all over his newspaper and bolted for the door. Stan couldn’t let this go without being a witness, and stumbled out on George’s heels. Everyone tried to appear casual, but it didn’t take long for the restaurant to empty and gather up the street to observe stubborn Swede behavior at its best.

“You know you only want that tree down for your own selfish gain…you and your need to see everything.” George’s jugular veins protruded with fearsome ugliness.

“George,” Harriett tried to calm her husband before he had a coronary.

“You’re so stupid and stubborn,” Stan counter-acted. “The way the wind comes off the marina it’ll only take one good storm and that thing’s gonna fall right on my house.”

Marge tugged on Stan’s arm, embarrassed at his behavior.

“Enough already.” The PUD manager stepped between the men. “The tree is unstable, George. Either you arrange to cut it down or we’ll bill you for our services. You have one week to make arrangements.”

***

“Stan!” Marge shrieked hysterically from the balcony.

Half awake with twisted boxers, Stan stumbled through the glass door. “What the…?”

The giant fir had toppled during the first fall storm, alright, and landed on George’s garage.

Stan roared in laughter. “I can’t believe that thing didn’t fall this way. Serves him right.”

Marge angrily pushed past him and returned a few minutes later, hauling his chainsaw. “Get dressed and go help him.”


Best friends huddled together under a blanket on the balcony, sipping hot mochas, the drone of chainsaws below.

“What a lovely view you have, Marge.”

“Why, thank you, Harriett.”


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Laury Hubrich 07/29/10
I felt like I was right there in that small town squabble. Funny story, full of drama:)
Beth LaBuff 07/29/10
I'd love to see these characters in a movie. What a riot! What a fun story, great title, and perfect ending!
Mona Purvis07/30/10
Small-town USA at its best. Every state has these characters, right? I know we do.
Good writing.

Mona
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/31/10
Oh this was wonderfully fun to read. For some reason, I thought of Little House on the Prairie and Andy Griffith. I think it was because you described such a detailed scene I could easily see it playing out on one of my favorite old shows. Grumpy Old Men passed through my head too, but I like TV better than movies, but reading articles like this is the best of all!
Virgil Youngblood 08/02/10
A modern day telling of Matthew 7:3, in a fun way.
AnneRene' Capp 08/02/10
I loved this and your right...completely took me back to that endearing town of Mitford. I would most definitely like to see this become a novel!
Rachel Phelps08/02/10
Too much fun! The characters are so real and loveable. Great work, truly. Loved it.
Patricia Turner08/03/10
Absolutely Mitford style - and I love those books! Twisted boxers (tee-hee)- hilarious. I love the MCs, the dialogue, the wives, and the ending best of all.
Shirley McClay 08/03/10
I totally thought of Mitford too! LOVE the last three lines!
Edmond Ng 08/04/10
Very interesting read! (",)
Lollie Hofer 08/05/10
Funny story. George actually reminded me of Denise the Menace's George. I kept seeing his face while reading your story. Funny characters. Great ending with the ladies enjoying the view.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/05/10
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and in the top 40 overall!