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You did such a great job of showing the raw emotion that one might feel after getting a surprise like that. The husband's reaction was darling. I really enjoyed the whole story.
Interesting take on the topic. I couldn't help myself when reading it, how it sounded like the book "Revolutionary Road." I'm sure it was not your intention. I believe he worked for a corporation in that one, and not his own business.

Nice job. Nice flow. Enjoyed it.
Ya gotta love Dan. Great story...I could feel the anguish of your mc. Congrats on your second place recognition.
Ah... love this story, Sarah! Congratulation on your level award and Editor's Choice!
Absolutely loved it!
Congratulations on your 3rd place EC, Sarah. This story is delightful - you really let your reader feel the mc's emotions. Wonderfully written!
Fabulous "slice of life" story! I especially like Dan's reaction. :) Congrats on your EC!!!!!
Very true to the feelings and fears a woman this age would have...congratulations!
Oh my gosh....I LOVE THIS. Great story, Well written and full of the humor I so love!!
This was the best: So, with my delicate sense of timing, I blurted it out the second his foot hit the threshold. I am STILL LAUGHING. I don't know where you live but would SO LOVE to meet you in person! :)