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07/24/10
My heart just ached for the little boy in this story - probably because it hits a little too close to home. Just a few months ago I lost a friend my age - she left 3 young children behind. Your story really made me feel what my friend's babies must be feeling these days. Good, stirring writing!
Oh this is so true.

Right after my mom died I burst into tears while licking an ice cream cone. Even the simple pleasure of that treat brought memories flooding back. After all it was Mom who taught me how to lick the cone so the ice cream wouldn't drip all over.

You've done an outstanding job of showing how sorrow can show up in every day things. You also reminded the readers that boys need their mothers as much as girls.
07/27/10
You did a great job capturing this little boy's heartache. My heart hurt for him. Well done.