The Official Writing Challenge
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K - you had me scared!
I'm glad she was rescued - whew!
This is a story full of suspense. A tale that many of us feel could be ours. You did a great job of relating to the reader and making me feel like your story could be mine.
Amanda, you did make me feel as though I was that girl drifting helplessly away from shore (except for the "cherry patterned bikini" :)

You even had me wondering about sharks and sea lions that could be beneath her. I kept telling myself...oh please don't let her drown, so I was very happy with your ending. And btw...really like your title.
07/27/10
Great suspense. I could see and hear this was truly a teenager by her actions.
Great message, but I enjoyed your writing style too. it was easy to feel it and follow along with her sudden panic.