The Official Writing Challenge
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07/24/10
I enjoyed this. You really bruoght the reader into the world of the aging and infirm - something that even I don't think about that often. Nice!
This is about so much more than chicken and you did a divine job of painting a picture that many elderly people are living. This is well written and pulls at my heartstrings.
good message to help the reader empathize with our grandparents, parents - and ourselves as we continue to age. Good dialogue, well-written.
07/27/10
I hope you get a lot more yellow boxes. This story deserves them. You did a remarkable job bringing these characters to life. I was there seeing and feeling all of it. I laughed out loud about the mc making sure he had big friends at school. Great line. Seriously, I hope this one did well with the judges. If not, it's a winner in my book.
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and in the top 30 overall.