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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Taste (07/15/10)

TITLE: Small Sips
By Christina Banks


“Great party!” Hilary yelled to her friend over the noise of the crowd.

Mary nodded. “Lots of people here tonight.” She said. “Plenty of drinks to go around.”

“This is the first block party that I’ve been to.” Hilary wiggled her wings in anticipation.

“Well, let me show you around and introduce you to some of my friends.” Hilary followed as Mary flew under a table, where several others were already enjoying themselves.

“See that group over there?” Mary pointed one of her legs at a group of males hovering in the center.

Hilary giggled and waved a slim limb in their direction.

“Stay away from them.”

“Why?” Hilary asked, looking back to her host.

“Cause, they’ll get you killed.” Mary said with disgust. “This is your first party ever, isn’t it?”

“I wasn’t hatched just yesterday.” Hilary said, indignantly. “It just happened that it’s rained for the last four days in a row. There weren’t many people out, if you know what I mean.”

“Well, listen up, because I want to tell you the secret to these gatherings. Just go around and sip. Don’t get greedy and drink deeply. I know what happens when you let that kind of thing happen. You can’t think of anything else but the taste, and soon all your senses are numbed with your imbibing. You’ll lose your head, and possibly your life. Small sips are all you need. Trust me on this.”

Hilary nodded eagerly. “Can we get something to drink now?”

“Alright, just remember what I told you. I don’t want to see something bad happen to you on your first night out.”

Hilary waved away Mary’s concern and landed on a nearby leg. The salty perspiration drew her to drink deeply, but remembering the warnings she sipped only a tiny bit of the warm liquid. It was everything that she had imagined it would be – warm, salty and a little metallic. Hilary sighed with contentment.

Flying to the next piece of exposed skin, she sampled. Over and over again she took small sips. Each one tasted different. Some were too salty, some too sweet, others had some odor that forced Hilary to stay away. She enjoyed the bouquet of flavors.

The next flesh was soft and sweet. The taste was different than the others - foreign almost exotic. She called Mary over from where she was enjoying her own draws.

“You have to taste this one!”

Hilary watched her friend pierce the skin and take a small swallow. Mary nodded in appreciation. “You have good taste, my friend. A fine specimen indeed!”

Hilary puffed out her thorax as Mary flew away. The group of males came closer when they heard Mary’s comment.

“You found a good drink?” One of them asked.

“A really nice one.” Hilary bragged. “You want to try some?”

The guys started laughing and clapping each other on the back.

“What’s so funny?”

“Only girls drink that stuff!”

“Your loss.” Hilary said

“If it’s such a fine drink, why aren’t you getting your fill?” One male questioned.

“I might have some more.”

“Why don’t you take some right now?”

“Maybe I will.” Hilary sipped, enjoying the warm tingle.

“Chug! Chug! Chug!” the boys chanted.

Hilary obliged. Soon all she could think about was filling up on the delicious beverage. She savored each drop, willing her body to take in more. It was a heady sensation, which ended all too soon.


“Got it!” The girl whipped her hand on the napkin. “Nasty bug!” She looked in dismay at the smear of blood across her tan leg.

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Virgil Youngblood 07/22/10
The title caught my attention. A fun read with a good message.
Theresa Santy 07/23/10
Wow! I'll be shocked if this one isn't a winner.

A common writing tip is to not begin a piece with dialogue, yet you did it, and it worked brilliantly. I fell into the story immediately.

I loved the prose, the theme, the character and emotion.

It was a very important lesson, told in a very amusing story.

Loved, loved, loved it.
Linda Germain 07/23/10
I love the way you think! This is terrific. I laughed out loud at ,"Chug, Chug,Chug." Every mosquito I see from now on will remind me of this darling story. :0)
Sarah Heywood07/23/10
This was great! I got halfway through the story before I realized this was about mosquitos. But as I continued to read your charming story, I quickly realized this wasn't ONLY about those pesky creatures. Wonderful writing!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/24/10
I knew fairly early on that they were mosquitoes, but it didn't lessen my pleasure any. I had a great laugh then scratched the many bites on my body. I assume I must be one of the good tasting ones, because I feel like I'm eaten alive while my husband might get 1 or 2 bites all summer. Very original and written with a smile.
AnneRene' Capp07/26/10
This is so funny. I just couldn't figure out what the little guys were and had a good laugh when I discovered they were pesky little mosquitoes!
Great imagination and great message.
Allison Egley 07/26/10
Hehehe You had me laughing throughout.

I knew they were mosquitoes pretty quickly, but still enjoyed it.

LOVED the line about them being "girl drinks." :)
Lollie Hofer07/27/10
This is the most unique story I've read so far, it's a great take on this week's theme. It kept my attention from beginning to end. I agree, it should do well. Story-telling at its best.
stanley Bednarz07/29/10
Congratulations on your EC! Well deserved.
Lollie Hofer07/29/10
Congratulations on your story's well-deserved recognition. I knew it would do well. Yay!
Angela M. Baker-Bridge07/29/10
Very unique approach, fun story, well told. Congratulations.
Rita Garcia07/29/10
Marita Thelander 07/29/10
Oh man. Gross. LOL. I thought it was birds at first. This really was a great way to address the topic outside the box. Good job and congrats!
Beth LaBuff 07/29/10
LOL! What an ending! Great work! Congratulations on your Editor's Choice award!