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09/12/05
A fun read. You really connected with the characters and gave me a strong sense of place. I¡¦m with Sarah, I hate slides of any height, shape or description. Snakes and spiders¡K now they¡¦re OK, so watch it Reese. ƒº I know they¡¦re not kids, but I¡¦d have liked some clue as to how old they were and if there was a reason for fear and/or why her friend was making her take the ride. Good one! Yeggy
09/14/05
I would be Sarah, and NOTHING would convince me. This is great fun! You have a couple of shifts in tense that could be improved on editing. Good object lesson on peer pressure!
09/14/05
Very fun! I could feel the entire adventure. That rat pushed her!
09/14/05
Never did a slide. I'll watch my back now. Good read!
09/14/05
Very fun story! What a creative take on the subject. I'm glad you entered this - it's not stinky! (Okay, anyone reading that is gonna think I'm being mean. I'm not - I'm referring to your hint.)
Oh, so cute, and count me as another one who won't do heights! I connected completely with the 'scaredy cat' Haha! Enjoyed it!
09/17/05
A fun read. Intentional or not, I see an underlying message of overcoming unfounded fears.
09/17/05
A fun story (just a few typos -easy fix) There's no way I'd let someone talk me into that. I'd have gone home first LOL :)
09/17/05
nice and light hearted. Sounds like something I would do! rofl!