The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 566 times
Member Comments
My heart felt tight with the danger lurking throughout the entire story. I was surprised at the last line. It was an enjoyable read, and after giving me a small taste, I found myself hungering for more.
Oooh! You're good. Great set-up caught my attention and descriptions woven into the character's movement through the story gave me a you-are-there apprehension. I enjoyed the read and the surprise ending.
Loved it! Perfect ending. If I were a writing teacher, I'd give it an A+. :0)
Well thought out plot. Great structure. Interesting story!
Didn't see that ending coming which added an inward pleasure to an intriguing, informative, and outstandingly descriptive story.
You did extremely well at creating setting with this story - I saw it, felt it, even tasted it! Also, the sense of danger was very real. I thoroughly enjoyed the last line too - didn't see that end coming at all. Excellent writing! By the way, I didn't spot your spelling mistake even after you pointed out that there was one :-)
07/26/10 I smell a sequel? Great story-telling plus mystery, intrigue...this story has it all.
So what happens next? Great story!
Suspenseful and engaging!
This was a great story, and you bring to the light the true danger that comes with those led to share the Gospel in places it is not welcome. Such a shame that those of us who have the ability to share it so freely keep it locked up so much.
This is a superb short story--would make a wonderful chapter in a novel or one of similarly themed short stories in a collection.
I think I knew from the beginning what the ending would be, but only because I've read so much about Voice of the Martyrs' mission in Colombia. I enjoyed your story very much, and am glad I got a chance to read it.
Intense with a great twist! I want to know what happens next!
I didn't expect the ending… but loved it! Your setting is tangible!
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level.