The Official Writing Challenge
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07/15/10
Oops-whoops! Pronoun blooper! "She" is really "Mrs. Shelton" here:

"This time she seemed to presume the worst by thinking....."
07/15/10
(...in the 3rd paragraph...)
07/16/10
My heart melted for Susanna in this story--and as it unfolded, for Mrs. Shelton too. Good character descriptions brought these two people to life for the reader.
07/17/10
Your story shows clearly how what we often hear is not what is actually meant. Your mc learns a good lesson. The details of description add interest to the story.