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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Hear (07/08/10)

TITLE: Echos From Heaven
By Terry R A Eissfeldt
07/15/10


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Nonstop room noise
Overpowers my mind
Taking the place of

Introspection.
Nowhere quiet

To
Hear the
Eternal

Words of life and love,
Instead there is a steady flow of
Nagging narrative
Demanding to be heard.

Each day, each moment,
A fresh batch of
Rambunctious racket attacks my
Thoughts, taking my time, my very life
Hostage.
Quickly the minutes, days, and years disappear
Uncensored,
All muddled together like a
Kaleidoscope of
Escaped energy.

Oh, for
Reprieve

From the
Incessant
Repetitive rumblings which
Effectively

Blot out life and
Undermine all peace and
Tranquility,

Assaulting my sanity and

Generally overpowering
Everything important by its tyranny.
Nevertheless, this noise will cease for
The time has come. I determine to
Listen
Earnestly and

Wait till all this
Hellish hullabaloo
Is finally
Silenced.
Peace reigns at the end of each storm, earthquake and fire.
Eventually quiet
Replaces the cacophony of chaos.

Out
From the silence I

Lean toward heaven, hoping to hear the beat
Of Godís
Very heart toward me.
Echos from Heaven, gently caress, whispers of love sweetly kiss. I hear His love.


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Beth LaBuff 07/16/10
I keenly feel so much of what you write about. This particularly stuck me, "Quickly the minutes, days, and years disappear -- Uncensored, -- All muddled together..." Great word choices, this needs to be read more than once to "hear" your message penned in these thoughts and images!
Ruth Brown 07/18/10
A lovely poem. Most profound.
It reminds me when God is in the still small voice, May God continue to bless your writing.Ruth
Kate Oliver Webb07/19/10
Very creative and moving. You did an impressive job with your words and phrasing, literally pulling me toward the peak of God's peaceful love. Very well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/20/10
This is the second piece in a row where I felt the author was speaking directly to me. My heart has been aching and your words help heal the damage that my brain has done. The piece is really inspirational and beautifully done.
Maria Egilsson 07/20/10
Heartsinger:

The way you formatting the sentences really gave impact to your words.

Oh to find those moments of solitude where all else is shut out except the voice our souls long to hear.

Excellent and so true.
Colin Swann07/21/10
I agree this is very profound writing. Loved the mysterious feel! Thanks. Colin
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/21/10
Very creative words--written beautifully with a wonderful message
Author Unknown07/21/10
wow. I love the pace of the poem and how the noise is interspersed with the quiet of God's love. brilliant...and I wouldn't have noticed it w/o your hint (too bad we can't format it differently)- but the hidden message w/ the first letter of the lines-- ooh-ooh-wowie.

can I high-five you? that was awesome.
Maria Egilsson 07/21/10
After reading your brick, came back to see the message that you had with each letter on each line.
Very clever!!
Susan Montaperto07/21/10
Thank you for a very moving poem. God Bless. Thank you.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/22/10
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level.
Jan Ackerson 08/23/10
Terry, please send me an email or a PM if you get the chance: jan_ackerson at yahoo dot com. I'd like to feature this piece in the Front Page showcase, but I need to ask you a few things first.