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07/15/10
Very good story and was glad to hear the baby cry at the end.
07/15/10
Impressive use of descriptions and the sentence structuring makes this a striking, dramatic entry.

I was hanging on for dear life, from grasping for the out of reach call button to the screeching halt of the car ride. I felt it all.

This is one of your best yet.
Loved this story. Could see this woman & almost hear her saxophone. My favorite phrase: "her death was only the bridge between choruses".
Ooops. Meant that comment for another story. Sorry.
What a thriller! The ending is perfect.
07/16/10
This entry held my attention from start to finish--so glad for the baby's cry at the end.
07/18/10
Just beautiful. You're a talented writer.
07/18/10
You had us sitting on the edge of our seats. It was story telling at it's best. Excellent.Blessings, Ruth
07/22/10
Wow. Wonderfully suspenseful story. Love the descriptions of the flash back scene.