The Official Writing Challenge
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07/17/10
Oh - this was such a pleasant read! Even though I've heard the story numerous times, of course, this kept my attention. I really, really liked the internal dialogue that Eli has with himself in your version. Nice!
This is outstanding. I so enjoyed how you put in quite probable quotes. The last line really shows how much God loves us. This feels like a winner to me. Outstanding job.
Caitlyn:
This was very believable, you brought these two characters to life. I liked Eli's inner dialogue..and of course, the ending!
07/20/10
Wow! Awesome job on this one! I thought Eli's inner thoughts sounded very realistic. Great humor interspersed too. :)
07/21/10
Wow! I LOVE how you brought this story to life. Great job!
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