The Official Writing Challenge
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Loved the title and cultural flavor. I'm not sure "not hearing (the call) is on topic for "hear", but I can argue either side. I enjoyed the story.
07/16/10
I think I got a bit queasy with the crunch of the catepillar as your MC munched away, but I did enjoy the story. I felt it was spot on for the topic--and I definitely can relate to Elizabeth's wondering if she really heard the call. Yes, God does often speak in whispers.
A lot of your story came through clearly by what you did NOT say--a wonderful (if not appetizing) take on the topic. Thank God for the "whispered" calls.
This is done wonderfully. I always enjoy your sense of humour. You mix it with vivid details that make the story come alive on the page.
Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and the top 40 overall.