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07/15/10
Good story line, strong mc. Perfect last sentence.
07/15/10
Very good story. One small thing you might do to make it easier to read--put a return between paragraphs.

By adding the extra spacing you don't get lost as you read. But, other than that, I really liked it.
07/15/10
Excellent story. I agree, it needs spacing.
You pull the reader in with thew first sentence. As a mother I knew your worries were real. So many doctors don't understand how well Moms know their babies.

Good job in keeping the flow going from beginning to end.
It was a well-written story, keeping the interest from the beginning. It was good to see the husband's humility at the end. With proper spacing, it would have been ideal.
07/19/10
Love the last sentence. So true!