The Official Writing Challenge
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Good story line, strong mc. Perfect last sentence.
Very good story. One small thing you might do to make it easier to read--put a return between paragraphs.

By adding the extra spacing you don't get lost as you read. But, other than that, I really liked it.
Excellent story. I agree, it needs spacing.
You pull the reader in with thew first sentence. As a mother I knew your worries were real. So many doctors don't understand how well Moms know their babies.

Good job in keeping the flow going from beginning to end.
It was a well-written story, keeping the interest from the beginning. It was good to see the husband's humility at the end. With proper spacing, it would have been ideal.
Love the last sentence. So true!