The Official Writing Challenge
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09/13/05
Thank you for your entry. A few tips: when it's a different person talking put the dialoge on a separate line... this helps the reader know who's saying what, more than you telling us who said it. Which is another thing... don't be afraid to say "said" after a piece of dialoge. Most of the words you used in the place of "said" only distracted me from your dialoge.
Otherwise you have a nice message here. Keep writing.
09/13/05
You are a gifted writer. Enough said. God bless you and that skill you've been given.
09/14/05
I'm not sure you need the row of asterisks after the 3rd paragraph. Good job at showing us this cantankerous lady; she was very realistically protrayed.
09/14/05
Ditto. God bless.
09/17/05
interesting story! strong characters. ditto the above tips. good talent here!