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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Writer's Challenge (NOT the FaithWriters Challenge) (06/10/10)

TITLE: You Write?!
By Carol Penhorwood
06/16/10


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You Write?!

I call myself a writer
But I can't seem to talk,
I shuffle all my words around
Stumbling my mental walk.

I “mow the carpet”, “vacuum the lawn”,
I e'en “blow hair my dry”,
The phrases swirl around my head,
I've “figger fish to bry”.

It's simply so embarrassing
The challenges I face,
When crafting words is my delight
Yet mine are out of place.

I think I have a mental imp
Who likes to “chick and poose”,
To see me stammering my way
Until I “flow a buse”.

So if I often don't make sense
I hope you won't be harsh,
The imp has finally turned my brain
Into a boggy marsh.

If you spend time around me
I may not seem too bright,
And certainly I'm not surprised
When someone says, “You write?!”

My brain has left me “dry and high”
And so I'll slip away,
And, hopefully, my mental imp
On someone else will prey.



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Jeanne E Webster 06/17/10
Really enjoyed your sense of humor! Some days the brain just gets all fogged up. Your rhythm needs some tweaking but you have quite a nice poem here. Blessings.
Lisha Hunnicutt06/19/10
I love the humor in this piece. It was an easy read that had a nice flow to it. I plan on sharing this one with my family.
The Masked Truelovers06/19/10
I liked the rhyme, the clever way you switched your words, and they way it made me laugh.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/22/10
This is delightful. I do believe your imp has been to my mind at times as well. This was refreshing and gave me a nice chuckle.
Catrina Bradley 06/22/10
I think those "tips of the slung" are something we can all relate to. The meter and rhyme are very good, and the poem is entertaining and made me smile.
Colin Swann06/22/10
What a delightful piece of writing - loved you poem. Colin
Carol Slider 06/23/10
What a fun, clever poem! I write much better than I speak, so I could really (REALLY!) relate to this one. Loved it!
Susan Montaperto06/23/10
Delightful poetry. I thought it was just me who was tongue-tield all the time. Your imp must have lots of relatives. I love to write, but don't talk very well, at least that's my opinion. Keep writing. God Bless.
Seema Bagai 06/23/10
An enjoyable poem. Spoonerisms are so funny.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/25/10
Congratulations on placing in the top 15 of your level.
Joanney Uthe08/07/10
Oh, I can so relate to this. My family is always telling me what I said verses what I meant to say. Loved the poem. I might just print it and post it in my house for my family to read. :)
AnneRene' Capp 08/07/10
Okay, no fancy - shamancy words...this was just all around, GREAT!