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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Writer's Challenge (NOT the FaithWriters Challenge) (06/10/10)

TITLE: A Sacred Trust
By Terry R A Eissfeldt
06/14/10


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One day
I heard a dove
itís mournful cry
rose above
the chitterings and chatterings
of busy birds at work

I sought
to see the grey
flannel suited
troubadour
to find release underneath
his plaintive soothing song

Alas
too many things
deafened me
Soon his call
was crowed out and shouted down
by urgent tyranny

Then wind
carried to me
a perfume sweet
of lilies
with redolence pure fragrance
intoxicating me

Captured
I turned to go
longing to smell
fair flower
scent Heavenís kiss of joyful bliss
rejuvenating life

Alack
my way was blocked
by chosen tasks
for others
no daylight left for wandering
duty demanded all

Your voice
called my name
In deepest night
I followed You
to darkened desk reached for a pen
and scribed our midnight song

This life
of pen and prose
poetry songs
and hymns
must be diligently kept a sacred trust
to glorify the King


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Sara Harricharan 06/19/10
Love how your title fits this piece. It gives a lovely double meaning to the message.

The rhyme and rhythm is very different, but works just right with the words you've chosen. Thanks for sharing!
Catrina Bradley 06/21/10
I really like the mournful tone of this poem, and I like the structure too. Did you mean "crowded" instead of "crowed" in the 3rd stanza? Either word works, but I think "crowded" sounds better. :) It did fall off a little at the end, but I still like it - ending the distraction-filled day listening and recording to the Song of our Lord. Just lovely poetry.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/22/10
How true it is that your piece glorifies the King. That is what matters most amidst the distractions of the day, that we take time to hear Him amidst all the chatter.
Colin Swann06/23/10
Liked your poetry that had a lot of meaning to it - some depth to it. Thanks
Joanne Sher 06/23/10
Just beautiful. The imagery and message are so poignant. This blessed me.
Carol Slider 06/23/10
Beautiful poetry with lovely imagery. Enjoyed it very much!
Susan Montaperto06/23/10
Absolutely beautiful! Loved how how your words and images flowed together. Keep writing. God Bless.
Carol Penhorwood 07/17/10
Lovely. I too often find that "midnight song"...