The Official Writing Challenge
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This is such a charming story with just a hint at possible romance. I want more. The details were so vivid. you really showed what was going on.
06/17/10
Your descriptions are lovely, and I feel like I know both of these characters so well. Love the hint of romance as well.

This may be a personal thing, but I found that the one extra space between the POV change wasn't quite enough. It jarred me a bit. I might put an asterisk there, just to make it clearer.

I truly enjoyed this piece.