The Official Writing Challenge
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This is so lovely, it just drew me right in. I liked the nice twist that it was a Christian bookstore. It seems there are less and less of them around now.
Great descriptions throughout.
I love this line
"switching on dozens of lights in a way as natural as brushing my teeth"
You made your bookstore come alive--a place I'd love to browse in.
Great story, A. I really enjoyed reading it. You had a lot of great descriptions, and you made your job sound like a fun place. You also captured how book nuts like myself act when we're in a bookstore. Great job! :)
The writing came across as very real and natural. I enjoyed reading this very much. Keep Writing.
06/16/10
I enjoyed this story a lot. I felt as if the descriptions dragged in a few places, but that is personal preference on my part. You have a wonderfully creative touch.
06/17/10
I could see, hear and smell it all. Well-written.
I'm guessing not far from the top, your "always" was meant to be "hallways." ;-)
I got to the end and wished for more, almost as if it were the setting of a much longer story. Good job!