The Official Writing Challenge
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Black River NY.? Are you writing about your childhood. Loved the real feel you put to a time and place that I could feel in my past as a boy growing up in a rural town of NY..

Your writng flows like a river and all I had to do was drift into it with sweet joy.
I too grow up in rural NY and it was a nice trip down memory lane. i could remember the smells you described like I was standing in the library itself.
You described my love for the library exactly. It's such a magical place. But I was surprised to find out Jody was only four. She seemed much older than that (10?).
Thanks for sharing your memories. I too thought the libraries were wonderful places to be when I was growing up. Keep writing.
Micheline, you told this story so well. You are talented.
I loved the opening sentence and the power it invokes.
You are a great storyteller. I would have liked to see this entry place higher.
I would recommend you break up your paragragps a little more. They're perfectly correct as written, but there's something about reading shorter sentences with punch to be more effective as they can stand alone. This is excellent.