The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked all the descriptions you gave; your writing style is very enjoyable to read! The only thing that tripped me up was I thought it was going to be about Frank. But that wasn't too big of a hiccup. I think the only reason I did stumble was that it jumped from talking about Frank to being in first person perspective. But that really didn't harm the story. And by the end I liked the MC; and also the visual of a big and gruff guy standing a whole head and a half taller than the rather lean "tourist" guy (Don’t know if that’s the way you visualized it, but I enjoyed that picture--especially with Frank’s hand on the MC’s shoulder.) All in all, the story was really good.
I think your character descriptions made this story. I could picture both of them amazingly well. Great read.
06/09/10
Loved it! I was hoping it was true... :0)