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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Editor (05/27/10)

TITLE: Comma Happy
By Ruth Neilson
06/02/10


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He came in like a tornado with his red pen blazing, daring the Muse to protest. The Editor sank into his metal folding chair and with an evil smirk began to pursue his victim. Like a sadistic doctor, he began to mark the pristine document.

RUN ON SENTENCE. SUBJECT-VERB AGREEMENT.

The blood flow began and Muse closed her eyes and wept. She could hear the sound of the scarlet letters being engraved upon her precious child—but was helpless to stop it. This would only strengthen it, she told herself.

THIS DOES NOT MAKE SENSE. CLEAR UP THIS PARAGRAPH. TENSE SHIFT!

The Editor looked over and smirked at Muse as she stammered, "B-but...it makes perfect sense. See, I'm setting up the romance for later."

The Editor just shook his head and set back to work, chuckling manically as he continued to read. But his pen was silent. Muse held her breath as he put down the red tipped weapon and picked up a softer pen, a blue one and carefully began to write at the bottom of the last page.

It has potential, clean it up and bring it to me again. I can't wait to see the finished product. Be careful of the clichés that you used.
~ Your Brother, the Editor.

PS- Going a bit comma happy again, are we?


Without a word, Editor stood, closed the manuscript, and gently handed it back to his sister the Muse.


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Laury Hubrich 06/03/10
We all certainly go through this - comma happy, run-ons and all:)
Gregory Kane06/04/10
What a dreadful cad. I hope the Muse doesn't give up. It might have been interesting to develop the story a little further and see how she responds to the criticism
Dusti (Bramlage) Zarse06/04/10
Oh, how hard[,] it can be[,] to go back[,] and edit[,] that first burst[,] of inspiration!
Karlene Jacobsen 06/04/10
Oh, I feel her pain. I wonder if he liked the revised version any better.
Rachel Phelps06/09/10
Awesome! I love the idea of the inner editor and the muse being related. :)
Joan Campbell06/09/10
Creative and fun to read. I liked the realisation that the muse and editor ultimately complement each other in the creative process.