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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Inspiration/Block (for the writer) (05/20/10)

TITLE: Unfortunate Incentive
By Kimberly Russell
05/26/10


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The letter fluttered to the floor, tossed without care. It came to rest under Blackie's stare as he willed away the contents. But deception awakens when least expected and reality had come to call.

He leaned back against the slate-gray brick, head propped on the cold metal of the bunk above. Could write for a while but why bother since his creative juices had been dry as the Sahara for weeks. It would be dinnertime soon anyway--at least his internal clock thought so. On cue, the officer's shout echoed from the hallway.

"Chow time--everybody move it".

Another meal, another opportunity for nausea. Prison made weight control easy. Most days he handed off the meager portions to his bunkies. Never a bad idea to keep in their good graces. While the "Fab Four" did pretty well, their cubical closed in on a regular basis and nerves could fray in a flash.

Blackie retrieved the note with a sigh--better stash it in his footlocker. The others would ask questions he didn't want to answer. No reason to garner their interest or encourage attempts to redirect his attention.

"Why do you type all day, man? You need to get out on the yard, exercise, get in on the card games."

The letter would spill out secrets he didn't care to divulge and he wasn't in the mood for their shenanigans--best get it out of sight before he left for chow. Mission accomplished, Blackie's mind replayed (for the millionth time) how he ended up in such a mess.

His success had swelled as he rode the wave, livin' the dream...until it took a nightmarish turn. Endless parties brought unsavories out of the woodwork. They clutched, blood-suckers drawn to fame and dollar signs. It didn't take long for life to ooze out of him. And he allowed it.

Days blurred and when the fog lifted, his existence had spiraled into a pathetic cliché. And included a prison sentence for cocaine possession. Two to five years. Along with any chance to salvage his career?

Endless hours at the keyboard had produced reams forwarded to his editor. But Drake made it apparent that Blackie's vigorous attempts had fallen short.

It seemed the cold brick he leaned on had seeped into his fingers and froze them immobile. Could be the end.

He had kept Drake in the dark about his current predicament but the editor grew more reluctant to accept the bland answers Blackie provided.

"You've grown stale, Blackmer. What's up? It's like the light is gone and all you push out is drivel. What happened to the eager new author with the fresh outlook I took a chance on a few years ago?"

Blackie pushed aside guilt he wasn't ready to face. Maybe he was prideful. Or was shame the problem? Honesty was a real issue, for sure. Thoughts to keep him company the next time he couldn't sleep. Insomnia had befriended him and visited often these days.

The door burst open as one of the bunkies slammed into the cube, eyes wild. He flopped down and curled into the fetal position as the jail-house tattoo of a demon twisted in a macabre dance down his arm.

"Hey, Juno. What's wrong, man?"

"Shut up and stay on your bunk." Juno snatched up a scratchy wool blanket and flipped it open. The steamy room contradicted his odd behavior as Blackie stared in confusion.

Soon unasked questions were answered with the scream of violent red as Juno situated the blanket to cover blood sprayed across the front of his shirt. Eyes shut, either to feign sleep or ward off further conversation, Juno wheezed in an attempt to catch his breath. The smell of nervous sweat hung thick as the emergency siren wound up with an eerie wail. They ignored both.

Blackie cleared his throat, hesitant. "Juno, I'm gonna miss ya. You've been good to me."

No response came and soon clatter in the hallway signaled the inevitable. Officers exploded into the room, accompanied by the clang of handcuffs to truss up Juno while Blackie hovered, ignored. But he knew the score: they would be back to interrogate him in order to verify his whereabouts during "The Event".

He didn't have much time.

Blackie grabbed his typewriter, fingers ready to fly across the keyboard. Juno's misfortune might just be the oasis his desert needed.


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AnneRene' Capp 05/30/10
Great intrigue along with painting the stench of prison life very well.
Terry R A Eissfeldt 05/31/10
Wow, you captured despair - made it have a life of its own. Well done.
Joanney Uthe05/31/10
Your title is so very appropriate to the story, and where a lot of good inspiration comes from. Great story.
Jody Day 05/31/10
The title is so appropriate and this prison capsule is captured and reigned in to the theme. Great job.
Lisha Hunnicutt05/31/10
Wow! I am speechless.
Carol Slider 05/31/10
The title certainly works--anything can serve as inspiration, even a shocking event like this one. You captured the grimness of Blackie's situation very well. Good job!
Brenda Shipman06/01/10
Great job setting up the scene by using strong nouns and verbs! And great characterization with the word limit. Strong writing here in this piece. Such a unique take on the topic, also.
Lollie Hofer 06/02/10
Your title was perfect for this gripping story. I could feel the MC's dispair and frustration. And the shocking event that released his inspiration, oh my! Great story-telling.
Mona Purvis06/02/10
We take our material from any source, so why not? Very active and interesting. Enjoyed it.

Mona
Karen Rice06/02/10
Kim, such griping words! Easy to get drawn into this story. Thank you.
Rachel Phelps06/02/10
Intense and completely enthralling. Well done!
Amanda Brogan06/02/10
Yes, how unfortunate that it took his cell-mate's misfortune to incite his creativity. Poor Juno . . .

Good job with the background of how he ended up in prison . . . and with a nickname like "Blackie." ;) I was almost surprised that they let him have a typewriter in prison, but maybe that's acceptable.

Hoping that Blackie and his cell-mates find hope in their hopeless situation. It almost makes me want to pray for them, but that wouldn't do much good, since they're fictional. ;)

Ann Grover06/02/10
But . . . I want to know what's in the letter! Great read.
Edmond Ng 06/02/10
A writer in prison drawing 'inspiration' from another's misery! Very sad story, yet it conveys the message very well of how as writers we sometimes need to add circumstantial reality to make a good plot and story. That's quite a different way to clearing a writer's block. Great work!