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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Inspiration/Block (for the writer) (05/20/10)

TITLE: the sparrow sometimes hides
By Jim McWhinnie
05/26/10


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the sparrow sometimes hides

Ah, I can hear my Sparrow hiding in fear,
oh, so close, oh, so near,
an oh-so-timid thought, nestled in the shadowed wood,
why will you not come as I know you should?

For your voice, I have waited and prayed,
come to me, come to me, be not afraid,
for my unpenned lyric is in need of song,
and I have waited and waited, for far too long.

Lonely is the silence that fills the air,
where are the words that I know are there,
desperate is the empty within my mind,
where is the meter, I cannot find.

Oh, Sparrow, do you remember when,
in the mellow meadow, now and then,
we would author together, you and me,
the odes of angels in sweet harmony.

We would sip from the waters of the mystic brook,
you would fill my heart, I would fill my book,
and dip our souls in life’s honey combs,
I would sing your hymns, you would write my tomes.

Sparrow, Sparrow, come home to me,
and we will sit beneath the wisdom tree,
crafting thoughts that come drifting by,
for once we were friends, you and I.


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AnneRene' Capp 05/30/10
Oh, the wonderful desperation in this made me want to go find the sparrow for you! Delightful poem.
Carol Slider 05/31/10
Wow--this is beautiful! The emotion in this is so real, so poignant, and I love the analogy of the sparrow. Very well done.
Kate Oliver Webb05/31/10
Very well done! The sparrow is perfect; while we may be anxious for its return, we must be gently patient and wait. Excellent descriptions. Great meter and rhyme, without pushing it. Wonderful to read. Thank you.
Margaret Kearley 06/01/10
Oh this is so beautiful - what a wonderful message. I particularly love the penultimate verse. Thank you so much.
Lollie Hofer 06/02/10
It always amazes me that you're still in Advanced because your poems are always MASTERfully written. I seek you name out during hinting time just so I can be blessed by your beautiful words (even when I don't have time to read anyone else's or time to leave comments). You didn't disappoint this time either. Lovely, visual, emotional. Well done.