The Official Writing Challenge
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05/13/10
This could be my grandson by just changing the names...it's that believable.
Typo...lose/loose.
I love the characters. You gave them such depth, even the teacher by just having her connect the two girls.

Mona
05/15/10
Great dialogue. I like how her inner dialogue helps to give her personality. Nice job.
I liked the way you used the fun wording the MC used to describe her writing and the other's writing!

I wondered about Coach Couch and wondered if that unigue name was going somewhere in the story.
The MC's feelings were so real they brought back my own experience in HS English. Good interaction between the girls. I was also tripped up by the Coach line, kept waiting for its significance. Nicely done.