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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Critique/Review (for writers) (05/06/10)

TITLE: Tip Please
By The Masked Truelovers
05/11/10


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Writing is an empty task if no one will read;
Story telling is vain if it doesn’t sow a seed;
Spinning a tale for weeks or months must lead
the reader on a journey for the soul to feed.

But for the writer to succeed and continue on,
he must be given a foundation to build upon;
Reader comments and reviews will cause the sun
to rise and bring color to the craftsman’s horizon.

Without the thoughts and views of many eyes,
a writer gives up hope and then denies
that he ever had a gift or really had desires
to touch the hearts of people with his stories.

So when you read an article, story or book,
remember that the author needs you to look
at every detail, good character and crook,
then comment so his talents he won’t besook.

If you stop seeing the author’s penmanship,
ask yourself, ‘Did I fail to give him my good tip?
What if I would have taken time to give him my lip?’
Maybe he would have offered us another script.


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Benjamin Graber05/13/10
Oh, I really like some of the pictures you used here. "Spinning a tale for weeks or months must lead/the reader on a journey for the soul to feed" - that is perfect! Inspiring, encouraging words - thank you!
You used a difficult rhyming scheme, and did well with it, but by the end some of the rhymes felt a little forced. You might want to watch for that next time.
I really like this poem, especially the first stanza. Great job!
Marilyn Schnepp 05/15/10
Nice thoughts, but poem is "pitchy"; doesn't read smoothly or flow well. Nice job, however, on topic.
Brenda Shipman05/16/10
Very effective in communicating our need for READERS to actually read, and then offer advice on our work. You described the desire of each of us! (teensy note - don't think besook is a word, is it? did you mean forsake? but then it wouldn't rhyme, unless you changed the wording and said "forsook" - sorry!)
The Masked Truelovers05/17/10
Thanks for the comments everyone. Thank you Brenda for pointing out my mistake about "besook". I should have looked it up first. My intended definition is the same as "forsook", so I should have used that word instead. Maybe I had a mind scramble. Thanks.